Do you like the beginning of this story?

I like it!!! Good use of detail, and I like the imagery. There are, however, some definite things to change. For instance, the part that says, "I came here alone, but for certain I felt watched." is not very good. I would change that. Maybe to "I came here alone, but I felt certain I was being watched.". That would be better. There are a few other places that don't flow well but all-around, the whole thing is a nice effect. I like it. Good job! :)